Renting a house or flat is comfortable or hard.Most of all,size is very important for renting a flat or house.For example four people their can not live in small house,because one or two rooms It is not enough for four people.So size is very important for comfortable.But sometimes maybe their can not live in the big house because we don not have enough money and,their have to live in small house.
In addition,cost is important and unfortunately sometimes cost for house is very expensive and maybe people can not rent a their favorite house.Also,location is very important for many people and for renting a good house or flat their must pay the lot of money.So renting a house or flat for many people is comfortable and for many are hard.
Yasmin
Yasmin,
ReplyDeleteI'm not sure where the title came from! I thought the topic was 'Things to consider when renting a house or a flat.'
You have some good ideas, such as size and location, but money is repeated in each piece of supporting evidence. Try to make new points.
'Most of all' is usually used at the end with the last piece of supporting evidence.
Try not to repeat your opening sentence in the concluding sentence.
You're getting there! Keep it up!
See you next week.
Emma
Hi Yasmin
ReplyDeleteI can definitely see you are improving! I agree with Emma that you have to be careful not to change the question/topic. When you are writing you always need to consider who you are writing to, and what the topic is. If it's an exam, you can't change the title to suit yourself, unfortunately!
Good work.
Mary