As the same as majoroty of people, i believed that exercise is a vital factor for having a good health.As a matter of fact, every body know that exercise has two divided facets, that include mental and physical.Throughout the variotey of exercise advantages, there are four most important items which ordered in this way.
It's good for physical health and body shape. exercise helps people have a fantastic fitness.
In the case of having healthy bone structure, everyone should exercise in a regular period.Moreover, exercise prevent our body from other terrible diseases.
Scientists evidences show, when a person do the exercise, his/her body release endorphin that is a chemical hormone that reduce the feeling of pain and can make person happier.
In addition, exercise is totaly diverse with addiction. it's impossible to find a person who be an athlete and drug addict as the same time.
In conclusion, to justify the mentioned elements of truth,now i can say that exercise is one of the most important factor for having a good health.
King
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Hi 'King'
ReplyDeleteYour arguments are strong in this writing and I like that you decided to organise them by physical and mental aspects.
Because the task was to write a paragraph, you need to format it as a paragraph. That means you don't press 'enter' until you finish it.
I think you may be using some phrases translated from Farsi that don't work in English. For example:
to justify the mentioned elements of truth ...
As the same as majority of people ...
These sound strange in English so translation isn't a good idea!
Did you try the sentence writing worksheets I gave you? I think this could really help you with writing correct sentences in English, so have a go!
See you soon.
Mary
King
ReplyDeleteI agree with Mary about those two phrases. The first would be better 'Just like the majority of people, I ....' or 'The same as the majority of people, I ....'
The second one I'm not sure about. Maybe, 'To reiterate and conclude, I believe that exercise is .......' ?
Let's speak tomorrow if you're still not sure!
Emma