My ambitions are, first of all, I would like to finish this course, then, try to do the IELTS exam. Because, in the future i would like to become a personal trainer and work at a gym. So i have been looking at some Colleges in England and Australia, to do the course. In Canberra i can do the course full time over three months in January 2012. It would be very nice if i can do it, and work in a place where i love to be every day at the Gym.
Sawah
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Hi sawah
ReplyDeleteHow are you? Hope you be fine.
I wish you all the best to reach all your ambitions.
As usuall I want to disturb you, actually you should not use word "I" in small letter where it means yourself.
Sorry I just tried to use error correction, and as I am weak at grammar I didnt give any suggestion about grammar in your this post. Mostly because today we learnt about error correction wanted to try to do it. and I hope you have not mind me.
Have a great weekend ,take care and see you on Monday.
Great to see someone practising their editing!
ReplyDeleteSawah,
You certainly work very hard so I am sure you will achieve your ambitions. Your writing has improved so much, (but you practise a lot, which helps!).
My only comment would be how you have broken up the paragraph into sentences, e.g. 'My ambitions are, first of all, to finish this course. Then, I will try to do the IELTS exam because in the future I would like to become a personal trainer and work in a gym.
I agree that you should work in a place where you want to be and not where you have to be!
See you next week.
Emma