Wednesday, April 13, 2011

Is agreat place to visit

Mecca is a great plae to visit. When you are decided to go there you feel humility(or spirituality) very strongly as muslim. After you see kaaba energy come to you in directly because of the fact that Mecca in central of the world. Furthermore, you are faithing god. After you do umrah you feel peace and satisfied. In fact, All muslims say Mecca is a great place to visit in the world.
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  1. bcwritingstudentApril 13, 2011 at 2:59 AM

    I forget my name
    amal

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  2. TeacherApril 13, 2011 at 10:37 PM

    Amal,

    I like you use of 'in fact,'. The topic sentence is perhaps too similar to the concluding sentence though.

    Maybe you could develop your ideas a bit more. For example, you are being faithful to God because....... (Note the capital 'G'

    Emma

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