Thursday, July 14, 2011

Smoking Cigarette


I completely disagree with smoking cigarette. therefore, there are alot of problems in smoking it. However, there is one occasion good that take too much taxes of smokers for cigarette and the government get it.


There is one occasion good and useful for cigarette that it pay taxes for cigarette. Smokers already pay a huge amount to the government that spend in type of works. For example treatment service, transfer and etc. Many are of the opinion that the government should more spend this amount in treatment service because smoking cigarette dependent to people health.


On the other hand, there are three drawbacks in smoking cigarette. Firstly smokers have a dangerous lifestyle and heart diseases are most of smokers, some of them dying soon. Secondly there is addict that after use of cigarette one time must always use of cigarette for long times. Also some people are starting to smoking drug. Finally smokers have got alot of illness. Such as heart diseases, pulmonary diseases , mouth and tooth diseases.


In conclusion, I would say that smoking for other people more danger than smokers particular children. Also it shouldn't produce or the government should stop imports and exports cigarette.


Ahmad Rahimi

2 comments:

  1. Rahimi,

    Save your own opinion for the conclusion. I think your first and third arguments against smoking are too similar. Maybe put them together and use the listed diseases as evidence to back up your first argument.


    My other observation is that your sentences need to be clearer, for example, where 'such as' and 'for example' fit in.

    If you want to look more closely at the grammar, why don't you print it off and we'll go through it together?

    See you in class.

    Emma

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