These are things that individuals can do to help the environment. Firstly, people can switch off all the lights and fans in the house when there is no body using it. This will help to save energy and electricity. Secondly, people can save the trees by using less tissues. For example, I will split my tissue paper into 3 pieces to use. Usually I will use tissue to wipe my mouth after meal; therefore I think a thin piece of tissue is enough. Thirdly, one can bathe quickly and use less water so that it will save water and energy. Lastly, planting trees outside the house can also help to save the environment. For instance, I will not cut the tree outside my house so that the temperature in my house will be lower and I can save energy for not using the air-conditional. Today's wastage is tomorrows shortage so start now saving the earth for tomorrow before it is too late.
- Angeline -
Mary : I edited already but I still post this again so that you can see the one I edited.
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Hi Angeline
ReplyDeleteYes! This is how to write a paragraph! It's so much better. Well done.
I'm going write it again here with just a few minor grammar changes. Compare it to yours and see if you can notice all the differences. If you don't understand them, you can ask me on Monday.
These are things that individuals can do to help the environment. Firstly, people can switch off all the lights and fans in the house when there is nobody using them. This will help to save energy and electricity. Secondly, people can save the trees by using less tissues. For example, I split my tissue paper into three pieces to use. I usually use tissue to wipe my mouth after meals; therefore I think a thin piece of tissue is enough. Thirdly, one can bathe quickly and use less water so that it will save water and energy. Lastly, planting trees outside the house can also help to save the environment. For instance, I will not cut down the tree outside my house so that the temperature in my house will be lower and I can save energy by not using the air-conditioning. Today's wastage is tomorrow's shortage so start saving the earth for tomorrow now, before it is too late.
That's an excellent concluding sentence. Where did you get that from? Is it a Malaysian saying? A fabulous way to end your paragraph.
You've really made my day Angline. This is such an improvement :-)
See you Monday.
Mary
I found the concluding sentence on the web.
ReplyDelete^^- Angeline -