I think exercise has many advantage for our life . according to scientists research doing stirs sporty at three times a week is might well protect our brain from many disease. like as negligence ,apoplexy,... in addition physical activities is useful for our mental. Because when you do too works and depress or angry about daily problems exercise could helps you to be unwind .Furthermore while we are exercising, more oxygen is being reached to our brain .Therefor our mind works quite as good as when we are depress and we can deal with our problem much better. For these reason if we want have physical fitness we ought to do exercises activities three times per a week.
However ,if you don't do it you might will be person who doesn't enjoys his life.
iman
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Good job Iman. You have written a REAL paragraph - topic sentence, lots of good supporting ideas, and a concluding sentence.
ReplyDeleteHaving good ideas is an important part of writing - well done. Did you do some research on this?
I also like that you are using linking words and using them correctly. Be careful not to overuse them though - it's not necessary to have a linking word every sentence.
You have some errors in grammar eg plurals (s), wrong tenses. Can you find them? This is the area you need to work on most. You need to have good grammar to express all your good ideas!
Mary
Iman,well done!
ReplyDeleteOne way of writing a list of examples is to use
'.... protect our brains from dieseases, such as negligence, apoplexy etc.
'etc.' means 'and the rest' or 'other similar things'.
See you next week!
Emma